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Students should be taught academic knowledge so that they can pass exams, and skills such as cooking or dressing should not be taught. To what extent do you agree/disagree?

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There is a widely-held belief that acquiring academic knowledge is sufficient for
students
 in order to pass their exams, and there is no need to learn any
skills
 like cooking or dressing. I disagree
to
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this
 notion due to some grounds which will be explained in
this
 essay.
Firstly
, learning different
skills
such
 as cooking is an indispensable factor in every student’s life as they may need these competencies in their routine life later.
For instance
,
students
 may move out of their houses or leave their hometowns to continue education in other cities or countries.
Although
 their academic study is necessary for gaining the qualification for
further
 education, various
skills
 are vital for them to live their daily
lives
.
Moreover
, instructing different abilities to children from young
ages
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 aids them in becoming independent in all aspects of their
lives
 when they become older. It means that provided that practical
skills
 were being taught to
students
 and asked them to use the expertise in their routine
lives
, they would tend to do all their tasks in their future
lives
 independently. Evidence can be seen in children
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 schools where
beside
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 educating academic courses, they focus precisely on teaching empirical
skills
 to their
students
. These
students
 are inclined to live without having
dependency
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 on others, and
also
, they are more self-confident.
Thus
, it can be said that learning
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theoretical
 knowledge and non-
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theoretical
skills
 by
students
 have equal value in their
lives
. Admittedly, it is believed that for being more successful in passing exams,
students
 need to only focus on their academic studies without any distractions. In
this
 case, they can use much of their time to study properly for their exams.
However
, the significance of learning
variety
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 of
skills
such
 as dressing in young
students
 or cooking in older ones is much higher than their exam results. To conclude, it seems logical that educating
students
 in both academic knowledge and hands-on skill
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 necessary
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 schools as they are of equal importance.
Nevertheless
, some people still consider the schools’ exam results all-important.
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