The tendency of human begins to copy one another is shown in the popularity of areas such as fashion and consumer goods .to what extend do you agree od disagree?

There is a contentious controversial argument today over whether having
tendency
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to follow
famous
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public that makes
people
to
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buy
products
or clothes like them . In
this
essay, I am going to examine
this
topic and
then
I think in some ways it can be true, so I totally agree with
this
idea. psychologically, the main reason that citizens always follow famous
people
is that
,
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they do not have enough
self confidence
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.
Therefore
, they want to choose clothes like celebrities to increase their confidence in
societies
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.
Moreover
, some youths have a kind of
competetion
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competition
especially at schools or universities to look better than their friends.
For example
, in my daughter
school
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all the children try to buy
products
which
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that
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are advertised
in
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on
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Tv or social media and
then
they have a kind of show off in their classes. The
second
reason that why societies like to copy other
people
life styles
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lifestyles
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is that advertisements in social media and Tv programs
has
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been increased
noticably
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noticeably
.
For instance
, nowadays
people
spend most of their time on the Internet and various applications like Instagram or Twitter in which a lot of celebrities advertise different
products
from various companies ,so they entice shoppers to buy
products
.
Therefore
, these companies sell one product in just a
second
to millions of
people
and it can help to make
people
look like each
others
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. In conclusion, in my
opinion
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this
topic that populations try to buy or wear costumes like
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the well
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well known
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public is true and it is increased in these days .
However
,
still
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,still
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you can find
people
who have their own style and they do not follow other
people
tastes and I think it is really appreciable.
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