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The tendency of human begins to copy one another is shown in the popularity of areas such as fashion and consumer goods .to what extend do you agree od disagree?

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There is a contentious controversial argument today over whether having
tendency
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 to follow
famous
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the famous
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 public that makes
people
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to
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buy
products
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 or clothes like them . In
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 essay, I am going to examine
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 topic and
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 I think in some ways it can be true, so I totally agree with
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 idea. psychologically, the main reason that citizens always follow famous
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 is that
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 they do not have enough
self confidence
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.
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, they want to choose clothes like celebrities to increase their confidence in
societies
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.
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, some youths have a kind of
competetion
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competition
 especially at schools or universities to look better than their friends.
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, in my daughter
school
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 all the children try to buy
products
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which
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 are advertised
in
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on
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 Tv or social media and
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 they have a kind of show off in their classes. The
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 reason that why societies like to copy other
people
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life styles
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lifestyles
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 is that advertisements in social media and Tv programs
has
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 been increased
noticably
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noticeably
.
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, nowadays
people
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 spend most of their time on the Internet and various applications like Instagram or Twitter in which a lot of celebrities advertise different
products
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 from various companies ,so they entice shoppers to buy
products
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.
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, these companies sell one product in just a
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 to millions of
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 and it can help to make
people
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 look like each
others
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. In conclusion, in my
opinion
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this
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 topic that populations try to buy or wear costumes like
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the well
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well known
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well-known
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 public is true and it is increased in these days .
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,
still
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 you can find
people
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 who have their own style and they do not follow other
people
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 tastes and I think it is really appreciable.
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