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Fig. 6 describes the values for the flexural
strength
 of
specimens
 with and without
bacteria
 solution in the three groups. In the
non-
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fiber
 group, the percentage of
increase
 in flexural
strength
 was less than 5% for each type of
bacteria
, suggesting that each bacterial strain did not have a significant effect on flexural
strength
. It was clear that
they
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 not able to withstand bending due to the lack of
fiber
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fibre
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. Adding
fibers
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 to LWC
increase
 flexural
strength
. It
also
 improves post-cracking
behavior
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.
Therefore
, the
fibers
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 resist the expansion of the cracks and prevent sudden breakage and
consequently
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 the bearing capacity is increased. As expected, the presence of 0.5%
fiber
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fibre
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 increased flexural
strength
. If the percentage use of
fiber
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 exceeds the optimum amount, it would be quite possible to expect a decrease in flexural
strength
 because of the balling phenomena that
increase
 porosity and heterogeneity in the concrete matrix. As shown in Fig. 6, bacterial
specimens
 containing the two percentages of
fiber
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 (0.5% and 1%) led to enhanced flexural
strength
. In the
specimens
 containing 0.5%
fiber
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fibre
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, BL with
15.64
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%
increase
 in flexural
strength
 had the greatest impact compared to the other
bacteria
. It might induce more and denser calcium with better performance along with
fiber
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, to
cohesive
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 concrete structure against bending. In the group containing 1%
fiber
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, the bacterial activity was increased to improve the flexural
strength
 of the
specimens
. As previously stated, the bacterial precipitation was intensified when more pores were created by the use of
fiber
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.
Hence
,
specimens
 with SP, BM, SU and BM exhibited average enhancements of 19%, 25.30%, 15% and 28.20%, respectively in flexural
strength
 relative to the control
specimens
. Most notably, BL and BM demonstrated the greatest impact to reduce balling and facilitate
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 uniform distribution in the concrete mixture. Bacterial performance was
also
 observed during the fabrication of the
specimens
 by enhancing fresh state properties that
was
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 one of the most important factors in the performance of
fiber
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 in the concrete matrix.
As a result
, the
bacteria
was
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 able to improve the flexural
strength
 of the concrete by distributing the
fiber
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 more uniformly.
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