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some people think secondary school students should learn international news as one of their subjects, while others believe that this is a waste of valuable time. Discuss both views ang give your opinion

#people #school #students #news #subjects #waste #time #ang
Schools and similar subjects about them have always been hot subjects for debate, one
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in particular
 is about whether or not should secondary
school
students
 learn international
news
 as one of their subjects, as usual, there are always two sides of the coin, others believe that
this
 is a waste of valuable time. I will discuss
this
 below.
First
 of all, let’s talk about the advantages of teaching international
news
 as a subject to secondary
school
students
.
Students
 being constantly updated with the latest international
news
, technological advancements and similar, can be of great help toward
students
, helping them decide their path.
Furthermore
, international
news
 is not supposed to be a heavy subject while having a lot of interesting and exciting open topics for the
students
 to discuss, relaxing the
students
 via stress relieving,
therefore
 better learning quality.
However
, whether the pros outweigh the cons is still the deciding factor for
this
. As the data
school
 books contain are usually severely outdated by up to 20 years,
this
 may conflict with the up-to-date information that international
news
 provide, causing great confusion in the
students
,
therefore
 very inefficient. Even if said information confliction is not a problem, the
students
 are still too immature and probably not ready for
such
 diverse and complex issues, which in turn could cause misperception if
information
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 is not carefully selected for children that age. Considering the pros and the cons, I personally disagree, and that international
news
 should only be taught as a subject when
students
 are in high
school
 at the earliest.
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