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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or diagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?

#price #petrol #traffic #pollution #diagree #measures
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These days
traffic
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 is a pressing problem globally.
Government
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to find out some solutions.One of the best ways is to boost the cost of petrol to control pollution and
traffic
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.I totally agree with some examples. One of the major real plus points of increasing the price of petrol is the fact that
people
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 become unwilling to use their own private car because they should allocate a large amount of money for the fuel which is needed for their
cars
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,
as a
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 they tend to use
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another vehicle
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such
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 as bicycle,bus,train,subway and etc.
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,the number of
cars
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 would be halved,but it is so important that if the
government
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 want to do
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 plan,public transportation should be appropriate enough.It means that there should be modern and comfortable buses,taxies and so on.In
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 situation,
people
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 put public transportation ahead of private
cars
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. If I want to find out some remedies for
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,I should say there are a lot of approaches.
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,
people
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 should be taught that private
cars
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 are so dangerous for the environment.
This
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 goal is reached by advertising and educating.The
government
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 can design some billboards or
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 teasers on tv for promoting
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 thought and
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 approach.
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, children should learn
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 lifestyle when they are
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 low
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.
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, the tax on private
cars
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 should be increased.It can be useful,since
people
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 may have less tendency to buy a car as well as it would be great that some bike stations would be located in every street, and they are readily available for
people
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. In conclusion,
traffic
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 and pollution pose a threat to human life,so both
people
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 and the
government
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 are responsible for solving
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 problem.There are several helpful ideas
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 as increasing the price of petrol and tax on private
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,
also
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people
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 should change the pattern of lifestyle and follow the new instructions.
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