City centres are very crowded with cars. They often cause a great deal of pollution. Cars should be banned from all centres. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this?
Experts throughout the world have argued that private vehicles are the primary reason for
pollution
and congestion in urban areas so Use synonyms
cars
should be restricted in the Use synonyms
city
centre. Use synonyms
This
essay totally agrees with the statement. In my opinion, there is an increased number of private Linking Words
transports
which emit more Use synonyms
greenhouses
gases that cause global warming. Change the noun form
greenhouse
This
essay will explain my viewpoints in detail with relevant examples.
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Firstly
, parking Linking Words
cars
are extremely difficult in the urban regions during peak hours. Use synonyms
This
is to say that commuters prefer to travel by their own vehicles rather than using public Linking Words
Use synonyms
transports
because they feel comfortable. Fix the agreement mistake
transport
In addition
, public Linking Words
transports
were not considered reliable for travelling and most people felt like sardines in a can. Use synonyms
As a result
, Linking Words
city
centres are very crowded Use synonyms
due to
the lack of parking spaces. Linking Words
For instance
, it has been reported in India that the government had been occupying private lands to construct parking facilities to accommodate more Linking Words
cars
in Use synonyms
the
urban areas.
Correct article usage
apply
Secondly
, the usage of fossil fuels in Linking Words
cars
Use synonyms
emit
fumes that could cause Correct subject-verb agreement
emits
pollution
. It means Use synonyms
to say
that the greenhouse gases that are released from private vehicles trap more sunlight into the atmosphere which in turn Verb problem
apply
result
in global warming. Fix the agreement mistake
results
Furthermore
, Linking Words
such
gases cause more Linking Words
pollution
that has vulnerable impacts on human health. Use synonyms
For example
, 60 % of people living in Linking Words
city
centres Use synonyms
were suffered
Wrong verb form
suffer
Linking Words
due to
Asthma problems. Even though public Change preposition
from
Use synonyms
transports
Fix the agreement mistake
transport
are
cheap and convenient, people would like to travel by car because of its comfort. Correct subject-verb agreement
is
Moreover
, Linking Words
such
private Linking Words
transports
are Use synonyms
reliable
than public ones.
Correct quantifier usage
more reliable
To conclude
, Linking Words
although
private Linking Words
cars
are considered safe and convenient, they should be banned in Use synonyms
city
regions because of the disadvantages Use synonyms
such
as traffic jams and Linking Words
pollution
.Use synonyms
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