City centres are very crowded with cars. They often cause a great deal of pollution. Cars should be banned from all centres. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this?
Experts throughout the world have argued that private vehicles are the primary reason for
pollution
and congestion in urban areas so cars
should be restricted in the city
centre. This
essay totally agrees with the statement. In my opinion, there is an increased number of private transports
which emit more greenhouses
gases that cause global warming. Change the noun form
greenhouse
This
essay will explain my viewpoints in detail with relevant examples.
Firstly
, parking cars
are extremely difficult in the urban regions during peak hours. This
is to say that commuters prefer to travel by their own vehicles rather than using public transports
because they feel comfortable. Fix the agreement mistake
transport
In addition
, public transports
were not considered reliable for travelling and most people felt like sardines in a can. As a result
, city
centres are very crowded due to
the lack of parking spaces. For instance
, it has been reported in India that the government had been occupying private lands to construct parking facilities to accommodate more cars
in the
urban areas.
Correct article usage
apply
Secondly
, the usage of fossil fuels in cars
emit
fumes that could cause Correct subject-verb agreement
emits
pollution
. It means to say
that the greenhouse gases that are released from private vehicles trap more sunlight into the atmosphere which in turn Verb problem
apply
result
in global warming. Fix the agreement mistake
results
Furthermore
, such
gases cause more pollution
that has vulnerable impacts on human health. For example
, 60 % of people living in city
centres were suffered
Wrong verb form
suffer
due to
Asthma problems. Even though public Change preposition
from
transports
Fix the agreement mistake
transport
are
cheap and convenient, people would like to travel by car because of its comfort. Correct subject-verb agreement
is
Moreover
, such
private transports
are reliable
than public ones.
Correct quantifier usage
more reliable
To conclude
, although
private cars
are considered safe and convenient, they should be banned in city
regions because of the disadvantages such
as traffic jams and pollution
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