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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extant do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#country #language
People
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 foreign country need awareness of
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 regional
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 it can impact
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society, I agree.In
this
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 is more interested in travelling to foreign places and inviting candidates as
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new
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.
Firstly
,
language
 is essential in public speaking countries,
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 it can be negative effects and serious consequences without proper communication.
For instance
, job hiring companies hire
people
 who are confident and fluent in speaking languages of English,French and Spanish.
Moreover
,
this
 is to make ensure that it accomplishes company reputation and goals.
Secondly
,migrating to a foreign country without an unknown
language
 can cause some social problems.
Such
 as,local shops and vendors always need and appoint native speakers because they think they are familiar with foreign dialects and capable to handle customers.
Lastly
,Government
also
 clearly mentioned to applicants that the person who is applying abroad need to know more than two languages other than the mother dialect
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because
this
 can be an asset and privileged.
Nevertheless
,some
people
 argue that experiencing in the public and getting soft skills
also
 gain some knowledge and public speaking skills.
Furthermore
, to obtain some practical knowledge there is a need of gaining experience in a particular organisation
this
 gives confidence and the ability to face critical situations publicly.
Moreover
, the government and higher authorities are inviting
people
 from different countries for the global economy and improvisation of infrastructure. In conclusion, In my opinion,
people
 need to know a foreign
language
 when they are landing abroad. ,
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 it can lead to negative
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which is emotional and financial repercussions.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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