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You have just returned home after living with a family in a English speaking country for six months. You now realise that you left a small bag of personal possessions in your room.

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Dear Simona, My name is Zannatul Firdaus.I have been living with your family for six months. Today,I am writing
this
 letter to inform you that,I left a small
bag
 in your guest room,and in that
bag
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 I have some important papers. To embark with,do you remember the day when,I leave your home,as I have to come back to my country,I was too much
excited
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in
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about
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 that day as I will be able to meet my parents again.I think you know that
,
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in
Canada
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 I have completed my graduation and masters degree and got my certificates.I took all the papers in a small
bag
,which I kept beside the bed.Unfortunately, I forgot about the
bag
.
In addition
, when I realize that it was too late.I was not able to take
this
 from your home.
Furthermore
,I want to tell you that I really need those papers.It will help me to get a good job.If you can please send me the
bag
.It will be very helpful for me if you
send
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.If you want I will send you my address by email.
However
, I would like to inform you that if you will send me
bag
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 I will bear all the cost,and I will remember your help
for
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forever.
Moreover
, it will make our bonding stronger. I hope you will understand my situation and send my
bag
.I will wait for it.Please, come to visit my place once if you have time.no
more
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 today. With regards, Zannatul Firdaus
Submitted by Zannatul Irin on

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