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More and more young people from wealthy countries are spending a short time doing unpaid work such as teaching or building houses for communities in poorer countries. Why young people choose to do so? Who will benefit more: young people or the communities? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Most young people spent time on
work
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 for the welfare of society. Especially
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 from wealthy nations are spending their time on educating or helping the
communities
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 in poor
countries
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 without taking any pay.
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the reasons
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 young people
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do so, and how the
communities
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 is being benefitted from the help. Many young people from developed nations doing unpaid
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. Because
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 most
youth
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 beliefs in the equality of everyone in the world. And, helping other
communities
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 will help to make
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 was conducted among college students
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 Kingston University, United Kingdom. In
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, asking about unpaid
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work
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 in poor
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, more than 70%
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of students
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 were agreed and were willing to help
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 those
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.
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, asking the reason for doing the unpaid
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work
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, 67% responded that goin
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work
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 will give them equality and will provide more opportunities.
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Youth
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 from developed
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, because of their expertise, will provide
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great success to
communities
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 established in poor
countries
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.
Communities
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 will get the most benefits from
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 service. They will get a better education, food and other daily needs.
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, a small village name Jhabua in India is one of the
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 areas not having
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toilets, schools and proper roads. So, the young students from
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Kingston university decided to do the
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work
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 for the village. Because of them
Community
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 developed 10 toilets and built the school.
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community
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the community
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 get a lot of benefits. In the conclusion,
Youth
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 from developed
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 beliefs
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 the equality of the wrl world. And because of that
community
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 is benefitting a lot.

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