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Wealthy countries should accept more refugees and provide them with basic assistance such as food and housing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#countries #refugees #assistance #food
People
 searching for asylum always
have
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 been a dilemma worldwide. Some societies around the world believe that well-developed countries should accept refugees, while others trust they do not have to.
This
 essay will discuss why I extremely agree that affluent nations should assist needed
people
 with basic needs. To start with, escapees.
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, United Nations reported that the year
of
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2019 had twenty thousand
people
 soliciting asylum in Australia,
United
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 States and Norway.
However
, approximately only two thousand escapers were accepted into those countries.
Therefore
, it is evident there are too many civilians suffering globally crucial
In addition
, it minima needs of survival that needs to be accounted
.
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 In conclusion, from the arguments presented, it is inconceivable to believe that despite the fact of several
people
 think it is not wealthy countries responsibility, they should assist those underprivileged nations in need.
This
 would bring a
better pacified
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 world.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Refugees
  • Asylum seekers
  • Humanitarian aid
  • Integration
  • Multiculturalism
  • Economic impact
  • Public services
  • International law
  • Conventions relating to the status of refugees
  • Labor market
  • Cultural enrichment
  • Burden-sharing
  • Resettlement programs
  • Host country
  • Border security
  • Comprehensive policy
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