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Many people argue that eating junk food has led to an unhealthy lifestyle. This problem has become more common among young people these days. Do you agree or disagree that junk food is the cause of the issue?

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Many individuals proclaim that consumption of fast
food
 leads to an unhealthy way of living and it is most common among the young public nowadays.
This
 lifestyle can lead to server health issues like heart problems , a rise in control level, and
also
 increased risk of diabetes. A company selling
this
 product should put a cautious warning in their
food
 when they are selling
this
 item, which can help consumers be aware of the health risk associated with it. Due to the rise in demand for junk
food
 they are available to customers at cheap rates. Governments should impose certain taxes on it so that end-users will think before buying
this
 product. Even though
this
food
 might taste good but the end result can lead to rising in health issues. As people in their young age have limited source of income fast
food
 is the few
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 they have to meet up with their ends meet. For ,instance
food
 chains like KFC and Burger King are
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huge provider of fast
food
 and is made available to the public at cheap rates. As most of the young people are studying , they are far away from their home town and have to consume junk
food
 are their readily accessible.
Moreover
, there is limited access to healthy
food
 items because of the high cost.
Also
, students
this
 day are not involved in physical activities are there were used to in old days.
This
 has led to problems like obesity and
this
 keeps on increasing. According to a survey conducted by WHO around 40% of young people lies within
this
 range. To conclude, due to rise in the production of junk
food
 has caused problems like Obesity and High sugar level and there should be some warning labels coming when someone is trying to sell them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dietary habits
  • self-control
  • advertising
  • appealing
  • convenience culture
  • fast food
  • obesity rates
  • nutritional education
  • affordability
  • psychological effects
  • well-being
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