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Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different age and culture together . to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

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Some individuals tell that melody is one of the reasons which gathers diverse
people
 with each other.I agree with
this
 statement because
music
 as an international language can establish calm behaviour
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among
people
 who listen to that from many
countries
. In my opinion,
music
 toung attract
people
 from every cultures and
traditions
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 some time while a happy
music
 play all listeners feel great and dancing together
although
,they can not understand the meaning.
Additionally
,the
music
 which
are
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 popular between various
countries
such
 as "Hello "that have singed by
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 can make
people
 in all
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 world have a unique
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sense
 .Nowadays,traditional
music
 in specific exhibitions
help
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people
 know about
the
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other places costumes .Citizens prefer to live in a peaceful environment with other
countries
 when
learn
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 about their differences.
As a result
 ,political issues will be solved in a better way by raising common sense between nations. The other benefit of
music
 is that celebrities who sing in a
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concert
 usually use branded clothes and other
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accessories
 ,
audience
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the audience
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specially
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youth
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the youth
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 try to purchase them
consequently
,trading growing up through different
countries
.
This
 business
enhance
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 the economic conditions in the world.
For instance
 ,after Korean band
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concert
 in
china
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 many
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youngsters
 bought Samsung
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 which all singers had on their hand while song. In conclusion,
melody
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the melody
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 is from other
people
 culture that can affect
on
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other person's emotions .The government should create some
cremonies
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ceremonies
 in order to improve the relationship between own country with other parts of the globe.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural understanding
  • Universal language
  • Linguistic barriers
  • Social gatherings
  • Mutual respect
  • Shared experience
  • Generational gap
  • Common ground
  • Inclusivity
  • Diversity
  • Artistic collaboration
  • Emotional connection
  • Transcend
  • Appreciation
  • Foster unity
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