Some companies sponsor sport and sports stars as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think it is good, while other think there are disadvantages. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In
this
modern era, companies
sponsor
sports
celebrities
in order to get
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popularity
. Few believe that it’s beneficial while some thinks would have
the
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drawbacks.
Sports
stars
and fitness freak
celebrities
will
sponsor
the big companies. Their aim is
get
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to get
getting
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the
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popularity
. And
also
they work as
the
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ambassadors to launch the
products
of the
company
. On the T-Shirts of
the
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sports
ways
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they
sponsor
the
company
. By all these
company
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companies
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will get the
popularity
as well as their
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, as well as their products,
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products
will be in demand in the market.
For example
,
usually
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people who do
gymnastic
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gymnastics
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should have to take
the
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protein shakes and supplements in order to build the body.
Then
they prefer to take
the
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those
products
only which is
sponsor
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by the
sports
starts
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stars
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.
In addition
to
this
, for collecting the funds we can
sponsor
the
celebrities
. It shows
a huge impacts
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a huge impact
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on others in collecting the funds. All these
comes
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under the benefits
from
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sponsoring the
sports
stars
.
Conversely
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it had the
draw backs
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drawbacks
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too. For sponsoring the name,
company
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the company
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have to pay
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huge amounts to the
stars
. Which had
the
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direct impact on the price.
Such
that the
products
would have expensive
moreover
, as it is
sponsor
by the big
stars
people easily will get influence. To
be conclude
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, sponsoring the star is more beneficial for the
company
’s development and to get the high profits.
Sports
stars
and
celebrities
plays
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a
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an
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important role in order to get
the
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popularity
.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • brand visibility
  • target audience
  • endorsement deals
  • positive association
  • commercial interests
  • conflict of interest
  • over-reliance
  • excessive commercialization
  • sportsmanship
  • athletic performance
  • corporate sponsorship
  • fan engagement
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