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Some people think that it is best to live in a horizontal city while others think of a vertical city. Disscus both view and give your opinion

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It is argued by a huge community of people that it is more beneficial to live in a horizontal society, while others claimed that
advantages
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the advantages
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 of
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a vertical
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 city
are significantly outweigh
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are significantly outweighed
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.In my perspective, living in skyscrapers have several benefits for both
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individuals and the environment.In the following paragraphs, I will discuss both points of view.
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 of all,by choosing to have life in high_rise building areas, the public helps to save the natural habitat,
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, they
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 out overpopulation issues.To cue evidence,in recent years,due to the population explosion authorities decide to construct high sky accommodations rather than separate houses and surprisingly,the colossal proportion of overcrowding is solved.
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,in China, working_class citizens prefer to live in multi_level buildings owing to the fact that it cut their commute time because these types of apartments
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 in metropolitan areas.
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, obviously, vertical cities require less space,so it damages
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 much less.
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,a horizontal city has many amenities.To exemplify,each single_family has its own private garden and back yard.
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 that,the service expenditure in these constructions is not as costly as in the multiple storey residence.
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, crowds who live in
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 individual house do not have security charges for the building or elevator fees.To
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 up, they may have peaceful lives. To conclude,
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 both in a massive skyscraper or in a private space have their own strengths.
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,I strongly believe that
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 a house in double_storied buildings have more merits to compare with single houses.As far as I'm concerned,at some point in the future 90% of cities will be vertical forms.
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