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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measure can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?

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Most
people
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 would agree that
car
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 ownership has boosted in recent years and is causing a range of problems, particularly in built-up areas. I think there are a number of ways that
governments
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 can aim to deal with
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. In my opinion, many big
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 in the world have traffic problems, but these problems vary.
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, it is reasonably easy to drive around my city after 10 am and before 5 pm.
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, outside these hours, you have to allow double the usual time to reach your destination. In other
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, traffic may be congested at all times and there can be the continual sound of
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 horns as
people
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 try to get wherever they want to go. On one hand, I think one of the best approaches that
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 can take in busy
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 is to encourage the use of public transport.
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 means the transport facilities have to be well run, and
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 must
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 be able to afford them. Buses, trams and trains are good ways of getting around, and if they are cheap and reliable,
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 will use them.
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, another approach is to discourage
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 from actually entering the city by building
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 parks and shopping centres on the outskirts. Many
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 have done
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 quite successfully and even offered the passengers bus transport into the centre. At peak travel periods,
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 can
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 run campaigns to encourage
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 to be less dependent on their cars. Apparently, a lot of
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 trips involve very short journeys to, say, the supermarket or local school. These are often unnecessary, but we automatically get in our cars without thinking. To sum up, we all have a responsibility to look after our
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Governments
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 can do a lot to improve the situation, and part of what they do should involve encouraging individuals to consider alternatives to driving.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unprecedented surge
  • congestion
  • peak hours
  • pollution
  • infrastructure
  • exacerbate
  • mitigate
  • affordable public transportation
  • congestion charges
  • densely populated areas
  • alternative modes of transportation
  • promoting cycling
  • healthier lifestyle
  • incentivize
  • electric cars
  • carpooling
  • tax breaks
  • subsidies
  • priority lanes
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