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Do you think that technological advancement has brought more harm than good? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

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It is irrefutable fact that the world witnessed many great inventions and out of that advent of
technology
 has changed the globe drastically.
However
, there is always debates happening, whether
this
 trend is beneficial or disadvantageous. In my opinion, even though there are snags, looking at the results, it greatly benefitted human growth without a doubt.
To begin
 with, now
technology
 is part and parcel of
people
's lives and
the
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dependency is unavoidable.
In addition
 to that, individuals are addicted to it and posing threat to human relations and health.
For example
, earlier citizens used to gather evenings and have social interaction, which helps in increasing the social bonding and knowing the neighbourhood more. But, now most
of
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the
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people
 indulged in tech apps
such
 as Youtube, Tik-Tok and Facebook and squandering valuable time.
On the other hand
, amid small hiccups,
technology
 is omnipresent and the benefits are uncountable.
In other words
, from basic operations
such
 as sweeping, switching on tv, to exploring the universe, it is widely adopted and aggressively utilized to achieve better results across all the fields.
Moreover
, it made the world a global village and improved communication, accessibility business and the job market.
For example
, during the covid-19 pandemic, our lives would be miserable without
technology
. In
this
 case, digital apps greatly helped as
this
 has been established in every corner of the world, and
thus
 helped
people
 to continue working as
like
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normal days without stepping out of
home
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.
Otherwise
,
people
 could have suffered without jobs and disconnected from acquaintances. In conclusion, as explained lucidly and looking at 360 degrees
technology
 is definitely a boom and not a boon. It depends on individuals and society how to leverage and get the most benefits out of it.
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