Write a letter to a cinema manager you have previously been to regarding a problem you had. In your letter mention - Which the movie was and when you saw it - What the problem was - What the manager should do to rectify the problem No more less than 150 words

Dear Sir/ Madam, I feel the need to bring to your attention an issue I have faced while watching cinema in your theatre. Allow me to elaborate
further
.
Last
weekend, I visited the cinema complex to watch the movie named "the stolen rock". While
this
is rated as 18 plus film, younger children were
also
allowed in the hall. To my ,surprise
this
film is full of violent content and youngsters are exposed to violence.
Moreover
, the hall was messy and unclean. There were popcorns scattered all over the seats from the previous batch who watched the movie. I trust you can empathise with my concerns.
Thus
, I am expecting you to put in place stricter rules on screening the audience with age-appropriate films that are shown.
Also
, I am expecting you to reprimand the responsible staff for
such
oversight to happen and make sure the hall is clean after the end of every show. Your timely attention to
this
matter is needed. Yours faithfully, Sema
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