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A person's worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possession. Old Fashioned values such as honour, kindnes and trust, no loner seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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In the present era, societies are becoming modern and even the norms and values are changing. Many individuals believe that the worth of the individual can only be assumed from his class or
status
 and what he has in his house. I agree to some extent that nowadays a
person
’s net worth can be judged by his social
status
 and from his belongings but I believe that still there
are
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 public who judge the other human from his honour, kindness and trust.
This
 essay will discuss why the worth of the
person
 be assumed through his kindness, honour and trust.
First
 of all, the
people
 are living in the 21st century and many things are changed
by
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 the passage of time.
Moreover
, we have all kinds of classes in our society
such
 as upper, middle and lower class. The community of normal and poor individuals are assuming the higher class as per their
status
 and belongings. Adding to that, since there is discrimination in race, caste so
also
 in the opportunity of jobs. The
people
 who are rich and have a good bank balance get good posts and the other classes remain at the lower grade. For ,instance about 50% of the community do not get
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 job due to discrimination. That’s why it seems that
people
 are judged by their position. On the other ,hand the
people
 of old ages still guess the value of
person
 through old fashioned as they are the
people
 of an old era, learn from their elders about the respect and judgment of a
person
. For ,Example Grandparents of the 20th century who are still alive know the value of a
person
 through his trust and kindness.
Therefore
 I disagree with the point that
people
 are judged as per their
status
 and material possession only. To conclude I agree to some extent that now a day’s
people
 are judged by their
status
 and belonging as it is because of the discrimination in classes.
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  • compassion
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