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Fast food is a part of life in many places. Some people think it has harmful ‎effects on lifestyle and diet. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons.‎

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In certain areas, fast
food
 plays an important role in daily life.
While
 it is argued that
this
 may not have negative impacts on diet, I firmly agree with those who believe that fast
food
 has dangerous effects on lifestyle in two areas.
Firstly
, I concede that fast
food
 is delicious and people, especially children and adolescents tend to consume it
instead
 of homemade meals. The problem is that fast
food
 often contains a large amount of harmful fat and
also
,does not seem to have nutrient ingredients.
For example
, pizza involves a lot of processed meat with no nutritious value. In my opinion, It is predicted that the more
this
food
 is eaten , the more obesity and certain diseases will occur in the future.
Secondly
, generally,
food
 is one of the most important parts of human lives. Notably, a large amount of money is spent on
food
.
Although
 it is argued that fast
food
 does not have negative effects, it is undeniable that
this
 stuff is expensive compared with home-made
food
. I acknowledge that consuming fast
food
 may be highly convenient, the problem is that I strongly believe that fast
food
 is not affordable. Many people can save money by cooking at home and they have the opportunity to innovate new tastes and use fresh ingredients at lower prices. All being said, fast
food
 has a bold footprint in several areas.
Although
 it is argued that
this
 may not have harmful impacts. I wholeheartedly believe that fast
food
 not only causes obesity and sickness but
also
, is highly expensive.
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language
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task response
Ensure that your essay is balanced by addressing counterarguments or considering alternative perspectives. This will help in presenting a more comprehensive response.
structural
The essay has a clear structure with a solid introduction and conclusion.
coherence
Main points are presented logically, and the flow of information is smooth.
evidence
Relevant examples are provided which support the main points effectively.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • calories
  • saturated fats
  • sugar
  • salt
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • hypertension
  • nutrient deficiencies
  • vitamins
  • minerals
  • fiber
  • nutritional value
  • culinary skills
  • home-cooked meals
  • long-term healthcare costs
  • environmental issues
  • packaging waste
  • carbon emissions
  • traditional diets
  • balanced meals
  • marketing strategies
  • dietary habits
  • children and teenagers
  • lifestyle implications
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