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Nowadays people pay more attention to foods price instead of their process of making. Are you agree or disagree with this argument?

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Recently individuals are interested in purchasing reasonable price
foods
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 rather than considering
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 quality of them.In my view ,the money which we pay and the processing ways are important for our health.
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 , financial problems affect the types of
food
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 that
people
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 eat. In the modern world,
people
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 prefer to buy their
food
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 ingredients
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 of growing up that,
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, they provide their necessities from stores .Most of these products are not organic and the organic products are pricy.Many
people
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 usually do not have as much income as purchase these products
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,get less expensive
foods
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.
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fresh and healthy
foods
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 are helpful for our body they are more expensive than others and citizens use not fresh and sometimes unhealthy
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.one of the issues about
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 are in metropolitan many poor
people
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 who live there are unemployment and are not able to offred
food
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 price
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 malnutrition is popular among them.
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,most of the restaurants and manufacturers which prepare
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 some harmful flavours to
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 in order to make them more delicious.Surprisingly,some
food
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 industries do not have health supervisors at their place to control the standards of their
food
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 for salt or fat .
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,in India restaurants that sell ,burgers do not pay attention to the process of
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 and some of their
food
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 is contaminated with bacteria that transfer diseases to customers. In conclusion,
people
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 should care for their well-being by eating healthy
foods
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 and need to know the mechanisms of processing and cooking meals .The price of meals is crucial undoubtedly and the authorities of
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 should observe
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 part to increase health in the community.setting some specific places to prepare inexpensive ingredients for poor families to help them to have a healthy meal.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic constraints
  • budget-friendly
  • convenience
  • ready-to-eat meals
  • food production
  • health implications
  • processed foods
  • food quality
  • safety standards
  • organically grown
  • locally sourced
  • health-conscious
  • nutritional value
  • sustainable agriculture
  • consumer behavior
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