Is The murder of Dee Dee Blancharde a biased case?

In 2016
Gypsy
Rose
Blandcharde
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Blanchard
was sentenced to 10
years
of jail time at Chillicothe Correctional Center in Missouri for
second degree
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murder of her mother Claudine
Dee
Dee
Blancharde
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Blanchard
.
Gypsy
has been said to have
leukemia
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, asthma, vision and hearing impairment, muscular dystrophy, and seizures by her mother
Dee
Dee
. She would be fed through a feeding tube and was given SEVERAL medications that she never needed. She had the mind of a
7 year
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7-year-old
old, never had friends or had any close interactions with kids her age. She lived with her mom,
Dee
Dee
, who was mentally ill and a hoarder.
Dee
Dee
had a mental illness, Munchausen syndrome by proxy, which made her fake
Gypsy
’s disorders in order to receive attention, money, and sympathy for living with and caring for a sick kid. Soon after they had moved into their new house in March 2008,
Gypsy
started connecting the dots and found out what her mother had been doing to her. She found out she could walk, wasn't allergic to sugar, and was actually 19
years
old and not 15. A few months later, she became friends with the girl across the street and was secretly introduced to a Christian dating site where she met her partner in crime (literally). Her new online boyfriend’s name was Nick Godejohn who had a mental illness called Dissociative Identity Disorder and was
also
autistic.
Him
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and
Gypsy
would secretly call each other on
Dee
Dee
’s computer and would plot their murder and
runaway
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. On June 9th, 2015
Dee
Dee
was murdered with 17 stab wounds on her back/neck. Nick and
Gypsy
were tracked down and found 5 days later by the post they shared on Facebook earlier that day (first image). After they were found they were immediately taken into questioning. In
conclusion
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I think
Gypsy
’s trial is straightforward, biased and unfair. I think she does not deserve 10
years
in prison
along with
constant reminders of her trauma and
instead
should be sent to a better mental facility with
less
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years
to serve. A person with the amount of trauma that
Gypsy
went through might not be able to maybe never be able to function normally again.
This
case is biased because there are people who think
Dee
Dee
deserved
this
and want to free
Gypsy
and there are
the
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people that think
Gypsy
deserved a longer sentence because they are in
favor
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of or like
Dee
Dee
and
dont
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don't
believe that
Dee
Dee
abused
Gypsy
.
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