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In many countries, it is common for people to consume fast food. However, some people believe that fast food has too much influence on our lifestyle and diet. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Many
people
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 opine that in countries it is common for
people
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 to consume
food
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 and some
people
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 believe that fast
food
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 has too much influence on our lifestyle and diet. I will support
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 view with arguments in the following paragraphs.
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, I think that fast
food
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 could have an effect on the human body. Eating a poor quality diet high in
junk
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food
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 is linked to a higher risk of obesity, depression, digestive issues, heart disease, and stroke, type 2 diabetes, cancer, and early death. Albeit, many
people
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 enjoy the taste of the
junk
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food
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 they are given, but I am sure many
people
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 do not know what they do to make them taste better. They use ingredients that are very unhealthy for the body. Sometimes, it is a risk if you go to eat
junk
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food
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.
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, imagine if you get a box of
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 and give each to your family member. Maybe after you had finished the one
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 you get addicted and want more. To sum up,
people
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’s opinion towards fast
food
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 is various. Taking everything into consideration, I believe that the overall disadvantages of
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food
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 are superior.
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