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In the future, we will have more and more leisure time as machines will replace many of the tasks we do at home and work now. Discuss the benefits this will bring and also the problem it will cause.

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No doubt
people
 can save their
time
 because of the latest technology in the upcoming days.
Although
 lots of
work
 will have been done by
machines
, it will be creating some troubles in an individual's life. Using apparatus will bring some merits for
people
. One of the main benefits is
people
 can save
time
. Especially, it will be showing shown more and more benefits for women , as if mostly task at
home
have
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 been completed by them.they can more hours with their family . Not only for females but
also
 beneficial for males who live apart from family.
For example
, some folk alone as well as do
work
 or study and they do not have enough
time
 at
home
 for complete all
work
 so
machines
 will help them to finish their task. On the other side , there are some drawbacks for
people
 to use
instrument
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 for
work
 at
home
.
Firstly
, if
people
 have fully depended on technology for finishing all their works,
then
 they become lazy and dependent on other things.
Besides
this
, some
people
 do jobs at
home
 as a helper and make money because of
this
 they can complete their daily needs.due to ,they can not do
work
 at
home
. If all things are done by
machines
then
 ,
people
 do not have need helpers and needy
people
 become jobless .
consequently
 if
people
 use
machines
 to done all
work
 they will make troubles for themselves and others family. In conclusion , thanks to modern machinery
people
 will have taken maximum
time
 for themselves while these things find some problems to those for
people
 who depend on that's
work
.

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