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All children should learn to speak a foreign language as soon as they start school. How far do you agree with this proposal? How important is it for a child to learn a foreign language?

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Few topics are more important than
learning
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children
 to speak a foreign
language
.
However
, the importance
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 of
children
 always be controversial. Nowadays many people have an idea that their kids should increase their skills
such
 as
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 a foreign
language
 expect their mother tongue before
children
 start
school
. I can not be denied that. In
this
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 we will discuss a few reasons for my opinion in detail. Possibly the main idea would appear to be
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 of their different classmate. Especially nowadays, migration
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 to
children
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 touch with different
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 in primary
school
.
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 can be seen in
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 to speak a foreign
language
 can
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the contribute
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contribute
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between
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of
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children
 in
school
 and
this
 means they can more easily communicate
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with each
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 other. A
further
 issue relates to
children
self
 confidence which can be
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on
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to
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 them. Because the ability
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to
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speak
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speaking
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 another
language
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 skill that can affect
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their mental health and their
self assured
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self-confidence
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.
For example
,
children
 do not evaluate
them
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themself
themselves
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self
 with
another classmate
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other classmates
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 and they believe in their
ability
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abilities
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. On the one hand, some people believe that
learn
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learning
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 to speak a foreign
language
 for
children
 before their primary
school
 is not necessary because they can improve their talent and skills afterwards with enough time.
However
, admittedly
this
 idea would surely be unacceptable
fore
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 the
reason
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 we said. In conclusion, it
seems
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 learn a foreign
language
expect
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except
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 their mother tongue before they start
their
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school
 it can be helpful for their connection with their classmate and affect
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their
self confidence
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