You recently organized an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel, in their feedback, participants at the meeting told that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel • Say what the participants liked about the hotel? • Explain why they were unhappy about the food? • Suggest what the manager should do to improve the food in future

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Dear Sir or Madam, I writing to give some
feedbacks
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about the Green Star's all-day meeting in your hotel on Sunday, 25th May.
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week, we have taken part in a meeting to celebrate our
sucessful
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successful
achievement in your hotel. Fortunately, most of
participants
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the participants
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have been appealed
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your facilities. They said that the windows which open
a
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city views are so impressive.
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, some people complained TO me that there are some issues IN foodS.
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, the waiters
sometime
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served an unexact dish for guests when they called
beefs
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beef
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, they received fish.
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, a vegetarian guest
have
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noticed to waiters about their start dish, they had a chicken soup. I know that our meeting
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a large number of participants;
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, your waiters might have a lot of works needing to
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.
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, I suggest that your hotel should hire some part-time or temporary staff for big events TO ENSURE THE STASTICFICAITON OF PARTICIPANTS I hope we will have more opportunities to work in future. Thank
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your attention! Yours faithfully, Wendy Nguyen
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Compliments
  • Ambiance
  • Professionalism
  • Hospitality
  • Quality
  • Variety
  • Freshness
  • Catering
  • Menu options
  • Dietary requirements
  • Feedback
  • Survey
  • Collaboration
  • Improvements
  • Rectify
  • Gastronomy
  • Culinary
  • Hospitality industry
  • Client satisfaction
  • Constructive criticism
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