People are becoming famous with the help of TV programmes and the Internet. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

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Nowadays
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Nowaday
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Nowadays
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the internet and TV strongly
intergrated
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integrated
to the different sides of
life
and it is getting easy to be famous. Definitely, to be famous have some advantages and disadvantages , that I would
like
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argue here.
In
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the one hand,
popularity
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the popularity
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of artists of
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ballet
and art, actors, singers is work for image of
country
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the country
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.
Example
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, the great young singer Dimash Kudaibergen, who was born in Aktobe, in
West
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the West
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region from Kazakhstan, have huge funs in different countries around the world. Kudaibergen
singing
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sings
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on
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in
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many languages and, as
patriot
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a patriot
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of Kazakhstan,
the
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part of his songs are
on
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in
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his original language.
Furthermore
, his funs
trying
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learn, sing lovely
kazakh
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Kazakh
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songs and understand the deep meaning of them. I believe,
this
young guy making for his country
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much
more
then
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than
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many politics. On the
second
hand,
the
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life
for
wellknown
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well-known
persons is not easy. They are do not belong
for
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themselves,
couse
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cause
they are could not completely hide from people who interesting
about
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all details of their
life
. To be a subject for cameras, the internet and TV news and saving private
life
for them are impossible.
Next
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reason is that the active style of
life
need
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to spend a lot of time for profession and career. As result, most
of
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very popular have not
the
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family, children, and
consequently
, offen getting alone and have depression.
Thus
, these conditions lead to using of drugs or an
alhogol
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alcohol
.
Moreover
, the
life
of famous can be
in
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dangerous
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if on the concert among listeners could be someone inadequate,
then
the
life
of singers is not
safety
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. To summarise, being famous have advantages and disadvantages, but I
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believe
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belive
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believe
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that situation is
lagely
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largely
positive.
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