Information technology is changing many aspects of lives and now dominates our home ,leisure and work activities. To what extent do the benefits of information technology outweigh the disadvantages

Over the
last
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decade
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there has been a massive rise in the number of IT employees who are able to
work
from
home
. While
this
development can bring some immediate drawbacks, I
conside
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consider
that is
more likely to have
a long term benefits
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in IT workers' lives. On the one hand, In the
short-term
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. there are several disadvantages. Primarily, due to the absence of funds on the security
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in
IT
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sector, in early
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months
, some security and insurance problems may be
occured
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occurred
.
Furthermore
, It programmers are not used to
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at
home
by online conversation, which can cause some issues in
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and community.
For instance
, there may be some misunderstandings about
work
sharing
that is
made through the online platforms, and
uncounciosly
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unconsciously
, some works might be done by the several distinctive groups.
Finally
, working, at
home
,
also
leads to distractions
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caused by family members, neighbours, and house chores.
On the other hand
, there are
further
benefits of
this
development.
Firstly
, different from office, workers, at
home
, not only avoid extra commuting prices and stress of being late
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but
also
work
more effectively.
For instance
, employees who go to the office should awake 1 hour early to arrive office in time,
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that at
home
are able to have a good sleep and
perorm
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perform
efficiently.
Secondly
, for the research in Yale
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, during working at
home
, employees have better
their
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work
-life balance. In conclusion, despite the
temprorary
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temporary
drawbacks, I believe that
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the long-term view these are
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outweighed
by the advantages.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
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