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Some think that quality art can be made by anyone while others think that it requires special talent and ability. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some
people
 tell every person can do an amazing
art
although
,some individuals say that artist needs to be talented.In my opinion,many
people
 have the potential to do
art
 and it depends on their environment which brings up. Many families who are in artwork encourage their
children
 to continue in their field ,
as a result
,engage them in multiple
art
 classes .Sometimes these efforts are appreciated by their offspring
consequently
,they will be interested in
art
 and even be famous for that.
However
,some parents do not have the desire to help their
children
 by teaching arts but their
children
 are talented and persuade their favourite .
For instance
,in ,Iran if a girl wants to be an actor many
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her family members will be against her ,
also
 we have lots of reputed actors who are from Iran.It means some hereditary talent helps them to learn that
art
 without any support. The time and place that
people
 introduce their
art
 are
one
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 of the crucial things which make them more successful at the artwork.
For example
,In Iran before ,revulsion there was many
art
 places that individuals work there but after
that
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 the opportunity to exhibit some
arts
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 were limited and most of the
art
 activities were closed. In my perspective,if the atmosphere of
art
 was available everyone can do that but without ,training some
people
 who have the capacity are able to work in
this
 major.There are many examples of
a
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skilful artist who has not gone to academic schools but yet they have inspired others by their
art
. In conclusion,some
people
 need to be under education for doing
art
 but some intelligent individuals do that by themselves.The government need to pay attention to the
art
 area at the schools in order to find
children
 who are talented in a specific part of
art
 to help them get to universities in that field.
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