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The picture depicts the different steps in the life of honey bees.

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The picture depicts the different steps in the
life
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 of honey bees. The total
life
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 duration of honey bees is around 34 or 35
days
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, and there were five stages in their whole
life
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, from the egg to the mature
bee
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.
In
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At
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 the beginning of a
bee
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's
life
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, a mature female
bee
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 usually puts one or two eggs in
each
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every
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 three
days
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 which hatch in nine or ten
days
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. In the
next
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 five
days
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, immature bees become fully developed and begin their
life
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 as a nymph. In the following stage, a week later, nymph moults for the
first
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 time to grow in size,
then
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 after nine
days
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 there was a moult again and a new young emerges which has new stripes on its skin. At the fourth stage, a mature
bee
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 needs four
days
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 and final moulting
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 laying.
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Finally
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 females lay new eggs again, and the cycle continues forever.
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