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The rise of convenience foods has helped people keep up with the speed of the modern life style. What are the advantages of this trend? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantage?

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Nowadays,
people
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 prefer to eat fast
foods
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 because they are more available
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,it has some drawbacks and benefits .In
this
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 essay ,I will talk about both of them
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,the disadvantages of these
meals
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 are more than advantages. In the modern world,many individuals work for long hours and most of them do not have time for cooking at home,they usually eat their
meals
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 at their workplace or restaurants to save their time.
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,fast
foods
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such
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 as pizza and burgers are popular among youngsters who eat outside as
a
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entertainment with their friends.Income in food industries
are
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 one of the crucial
portion
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portions
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 of money taking.many employees work in factories which prepare and sell
foods
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 respectively.
Consequently
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,some financial problems will be solved in these communities.
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 ,in the US the Macdonald
resturants
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restaurants
 are one of the best
opportunity
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opportunities
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 for
people
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 who look for
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a job
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job
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jobs
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.
On the other hand
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,some of these
meals
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 are oily and salty which are not healthy and lead to some health issues.Heart disease has raised in modern countries
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 to countries
which
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consuming
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consume
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 less fast
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foods
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food
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.
Moreover
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,obesity is one of the common health problems in western nations that
related
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is related
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 to fatty
foods
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.
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,
people
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's lifestyle changed in families who eat more restaurant
meal
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meals
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,often they are not at home and do not eat
meals
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 at
time
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 and with their families.For
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this
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these
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reasons
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reason
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.eating prepared
foods
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 have detrimental effects on individuals well-being. In conclusion,in fast pace
world
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,world
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 individuals are busy with their work or study and
cook
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cooking
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 homemade
meals
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 are difficult for many which inclined them to eat these unhealthy
foods
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.If authorities pay attention to
standardize
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standardizing
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non homemade
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non-homemade
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foods
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 in order to decrease salt and oil in them ,they will be
healther
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healthier
 for citizens.Educating students at schools
improve
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to improve
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 young
people
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knowledgeable
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knowledge
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 about
foods
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 .
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