The tendency of news reports in the media to focus more on problems and emergencies than on positive developments is harmful to the individuals and the society as a whole. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The
media
has had a huge impact on the public especially since the invention of television. There
is
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recently a contentious argument
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broadcasting more negative incidents rather than positive events has detrimental effects on citizens and their communities. I partially concur with
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notion as there are both advantages and drawbacks
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reporting more negative news. It is undoubted that letting residents know what problems are happening in their society is crucial because
this
can increase their awareness of the problems that they have to pay more attention to. To illustrate, reporting
car
accidents that happened in the day and explaining their causes can help people realise what they have to be careful of when driving a
car
.
Also
, knowing possible
car
defects or human errors which may threaten drivers' lives potentially encourage
car
owners to have regular
car
inspections or to undertake safe
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.
This
awareness could be overlooked if the
media
is more
focusing
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on pleasant news.
On the other hand
, it is
also
evident that the number of reports of bad news influences the public negatively. There is a good example that occurred two years ago and is still ongoing, which is COVID-19; the pandemic of highly infectious virus attacked our society and we were in serious danger. Fortunately, the vaccines to fight against the virus have been invented and people
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begun to take those vaccines.
However
, the
media
put a spotlight on its side effects
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are basically mild and only a few vaccine receivers (mostly older people or persons with comorbidities) are affected.
As a result
, citizens are frightened and
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hesitant to take the vaccination.
This
further
threatened our society by not reducing the chance of another pandemic. In conclusion, as discussed above, focusing more on issues that are subtle to the public is not beneficial
although
residents can have some benefits from these reports.
Therefore
, the
media
should carefully balance out the amount of positive and negative information.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • news reports
  • media focus
  • negative news
  • positive developments
  • stress and anxiety
  • skewed perception of reality
  • world view
  • desensitization
  • pessimistic outlook
  • general public
  • mental well-being
  • proactive problem-solving
  • holistic view
  • informed decision-making
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