The tendency of news reports in the media to focus more on problems and emergencies than on positive developments is harmful to the individuals and the society as a whole. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The
media
has had a huge impact on the public especially since the invention of television. There is
recently a contentious argument Verb problem
has
whether
broadcasting more negative incidents rather than positive events has detrimental effects on citizens and their communities. I partially concur with Change preposition
about whether
this
notion as there are both advantages and drawbacks in
reporting more negative news.
It is undoubted that letting residents know what problems are happening in their society is crucial because Change preposition
to
this
can increase their awareness of the problems that they have to pay more attention to. To illustrate, reporting car
accidents that happened in the day and explaining their causes can help people realise what they have to be careful of when driving a car
. Also
, knowing possible car
defects or human errors which may threaten drivers' lives potentially encourage car
owners to have regular car
inspections or to undertake safe drive
. Replace the word
driving
This
awareness could be overlooked if the media
is more focusing
on pleasant news.
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focused
On the other hand
, it is also
evident that the number of reports of bad news influences the public negatively. There is a good example that occurred two years ago and is still ongoing, which is COVID-19; the pandemic of highly infectious virus attacked our society and we were in serious danger. Fortunately, the vaccines to fight against the virus have been invented and people had
begun to take those vaccines. Wrong verb form
have
However
, the media
put a spotlight on its side effects that
are basically mild and only a few vaccine receivers (mostly older people or persons with comorbidities) are affected. Correct pronoun usage
which
As a result
, citizens are frightened and became
hesitant to take the vaccination. Wrong verb form
become
This
further
threatened our society by not reducing the chance of another pandemic.
In conclusion, as discussed above, focusing more on issues that are subtle to the public is not beneficial although
residents can have some benefits from these reports. Therefore
, the media
should carefully balance out the amount of positive and negative information.Submitted by take_pleasure_seriously4.30 on
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