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many people like to eat unhealthy food even though they know it is bad for them. why? what are the effective ways to improve people's eating habits?

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People, regardless of their social class, crave unhealthy
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 containing excessive sugar, fat and salt mainly because they look enticing and taste delicious, which
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 triggers the release of certain pleasure-inducing chemicals inside their bodies. There are some reasons for
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 trend and several solutions will be given in the following essay. Our race is programmed to consume more than what is needed to survive in primitive ages
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 when our ancestors were unable to have
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 easy access to the wide variety of food items we encounter nowadays, and
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 genetic make-up descended from prehistoric human beings encourages today's urban residents to devour the
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 in plates mercilessly. Another factor to consider is
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mood. When people are under stress, a common mental state in the workplace and at school, junk food seems to be a favourable choice in which happiness and relief are prioritized. There are several approaches that may alter our food choice in a healthier direction. Governments should adopt policies promoting healthier eating habits by producing suggestions, tips and specific plans for free for those willing to adopt changes.
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, the ban of advertising
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unhealthy
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 should be introduced as these promotions are quite appealing and keep customers reminded of their existence. In comparison, vegetables and freshly cooked meals are relatively more expensive and time-consuming whereas modern inhabitants are generally tight either in budget or private time.
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, in order to help them eat healthy
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, the production of vegetables should be accelerated to bring down the prices.
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