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In every city the car is king of the road.cars cause death and injury and air pollution, and they make life difficult and dangerous for others.It is time to reduce the number of cars in our cities and to encourage other means of transport.do you agree with this opinion?

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 modern world,
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car
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the car
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 is
main
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 source of transportation for everyone in day-to-day life.we will have
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many disadvantages
by
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 travelling
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the
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car
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.that cause accidents and air pollution will increase.I strongly believe that
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we should encourage
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other means of transport rather than using
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four wheelers
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.
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,
government
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the government
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 should increase the public
tranport
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transport
 facilities.They should keep the fares affordable and buses should arrive on time
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 should increase the number of buses.
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,they should introduce the new rules and legislation on
owning
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 of the
cars
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 that
their
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 should be only one
car
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to
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 one family.By taking
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 rule
in
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account
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 would
causenproblem
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cause problem
cause problems
 for the ones who have the desire
in
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car
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 collection.
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,by taking the vehicles on road by following the even and odd sequence.by applying
this
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 technique we can control the pollution.Apart from
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,the life period of
cars
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.
such
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 that,if the
cars
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is
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 taken out
frm
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from
 the showroom
then
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 should run on the road only ten years not more than that. In the areas of cities
work places
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workplaces
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sould
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should
could
 be on
walk able
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walkable
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 distance or can travel by bicycles.from the early
days
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 bicycle had used widely for sake of travelling.It is cheap and as well as ecofriendly. To
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 that, we can replace the
cars
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 by taking in accordance of vehicles
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 as bicycles and public transport And by applying some legislative rules,we can control the number of
cars
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 on roads.

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