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Internet is a great source of information and has opened-up opportunities for all people to learn all over the world. Is all information reliable on the internet? What could be done to control the information online.

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Nowadays, people, around the globe, search the internet to find out
information
 that they need in their everyday life. I believe that all the
data
 accessed through google is not reliable
however
 all kinds of advice are available
in
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 the
web
. In
this
 essay, I will discuss why the messages provided by all the
websites
is
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 not genuine and how we can keep control of the incorrect
data
 that we may gain from the online world. To commence with, everyone ranging from governments to business
/
education
/
health
/
welfare agencies have their own
websites
 through which they divulge different types of
data
 to
public
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/
clients.
Besides
, many scammers and fraudulent people
also
 run their own
websites
 which are intended to rip off people through false
message
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messages
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.
For example
, when we search for
a particular
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information
in
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 the
web
, the name of too many
websites
 pops up on our screen at the same time. We have difficulty finding out which
website
 can provide
right
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information
. If we cannot identify the genuine
website
, we may receive
wrong
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information
. We can save
us
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 from receiving misleading
data
 by searching the
website
 of a particular organisation that we are looking for.
Nevertheless
, too many
web
 addresses with similar
name
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names
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 open at the same time, we can choose the right
website
 by reading
correct
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web-address
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 of the organisation and opening it.
This
 process can rescue us from junk
information
. To conclude,
however
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 we depend on the internet for learning or receiving knowledge, we should be aware of the false
information
 that we may acquire from the
web
. We can take control of all that by sticking to the genuine service providers’
website
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websites
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.
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