In the past, people wore their traditional clothes and followed their culture. These days, most people wear similar clothes and therefore look very similar to one another. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Fashion
is changing
generation
by
generation
. Decades before, people would wear traditional clothes, different from country to country. Nowadays, with
the
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globalization,
fashion
has turned to be more and more similar even to the two ends of the world. Some may say
this
phenomenon led to culture dying out and yet in my opinion, it has created another culture. Without question, the traditional costumes
represents
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one
generation
and follow their culture,
however
, in modern society, those costumes bring us inconvenience. The traditional clothes are created and designed to fit the need of people in the past for their daily usage
such
as for farming and harvesting which are no longer a main industry in the 20 century. To adapt to modern lives, coming out with creative outfits and functional designs is absolutely a positive development.
Additionally
,
although
people are wearing similar outfits, they actually contain various
of
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cultures and ideas. In the past, countries are very isolated due to the boundaries and distances, ideas and knowledge exchange was limited. Nowadays,
fashion
designers can share and combine different elements from various
of
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countries
,
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and eventually created
fashion
trends only for
this
generation
such
as Hip-hop and vintage. It seems we are wearing the same t-shirt, but the style could be totally different.
Fashion
and
trend
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change by
generation
. The tradition is irreplaceable, memorable and has become a teacher of
this
current time, reflected in the
fashion
industry.
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