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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

#growth #shops #towns #cities
Dear Sir, I am Aman Asati. I am writing you concerning about the job posting, in an Australian magazine, to live with your family for half year and take care of your six-year-old child. I love children since I consider them as a bundle of joy and that's why I took care of some young children as a babysitter in my hometown I am confident that I would be able to render a great service in taking care of your child since I have had a good experience in raising a couple of younger siblings as the eldest child of my family. In fact, I find children so special that I have taken a short online course on parenting so that I could relate to them in a better way. By the way, in my free time, I will be exploring new places and visiting The National Park to see the famous Kangaroo’s.
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, I will watch my favourite Australian Big Bash League. I hope to hear from you soon. Yours faithfully, Aman Asati
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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