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Nowadays, a lot of offices employ open-space designs instead of separate rooms for work. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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In a company collaboration is
most
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 crucial part of success. Currently, most companies are preferring
open-space
designs
instead
 of separate cabins for
work
. In
this
 essay, we will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of
open-space
designs
 in exchange
of
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 small cabin
offices
. Many argue that
open-space
offices
is
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 increasing collaboration in the team and reducing the stress because of it. Because of no barrier between the
employees
, they can talk and roam freely without any hesitation.
For instance
, the Neilsen data shows that 80% of the
employees
 working in the open space complete their
work
 faster than closed cabins
offices
. At
last
, it shows that
open-space
designs
 are more advantageous for big companies to complete their
work
 rapidly.
However
, there are
few
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 disadvantages
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 by some people. With closed-office ,space there will be maintained privacy for each of the
employees
. Sometimes
employees
 need more privacy so that other
employees
 can't see their personal things.
For example
,
Facebook
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employee
 named Ayang-Yun complained about the password theft by the
employee
, who was sitting close to him. Later it was found out that due to the open-office the other
employee
 found out the password as he was able to see him and
their
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 was no separate cabin between them . It shows that how could closed cabin would provide
the
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safety and maintain the privacy of the
employee
. In conclusion,
open-space
designs
 have
its
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 own benefits and at
a
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 same time
its
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 few disadvantages too. But overall, open space
offices
 help teams to collaborate more and
work
 efficiently.
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