Many people today do not feel safe either at home or when they are out. What are the causes? What are the solutions?

These days the feeling of unsecured can be
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both while
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inside or outside
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essay
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will discuss the roots
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of why
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these
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and suggest some possible solutions
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solve them. There are many reasons to support why
people
can feel unsafe everywhere.
First
of all, the response
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the increase in
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of criminal cases around living areas
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people
become more nervous about the higher possibility to
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with them.
Secondly
, the criminal places are used for committing the crime. If the situation
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in the house, it will increase fear emotions in the communities.
Moreover
, The more the lack of
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duty and bad services of them
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, the more unsafe feelings are high up. The solutions for these problems can be in several ways. Hiring more police to protect
people
in the areas is one
such
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great choice to attack the problem. The
next
idea is
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the
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hard punishment for the
crime
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cases in order to
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the fear to do
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bad things.
Lastly
, introducing the high technologies to help detect the cases. To
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in
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can use to chase
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thief
who had just
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committed
the crime not only in outdoor but
also
indoor as it is seen in many news
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. In conclusion, the roots of unsafe
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from
people
can be solved in many ways.
Moreover
, in my opinion, society
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to have public
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responsibilities
to
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own areas as well since it would add more
people
to monitor the situations and the communities would become
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.
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