Many manufactured food and drink products contain high level off sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

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processed foods or drinks contain
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high levels of
sugar
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which are dangerous for public health.
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, these
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of
products
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should be more expensive to prevent
people
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from buying. I disagree with the statement because it isn't a sustainable method for encouraging
people
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in consuming less
sugar
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. I believe adding
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tax
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without increasing a selling price and enforcing
companies
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in taking care of public health are
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better
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way
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To begin
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with,
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should be kept on
products
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that contain a high dose of
sugar
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.
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will force manufactures to produce quality foods,
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, they will receive less
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.
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, producing healthy
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is the responsibility of manufactures, whereas raising a selling price implies that the responsibility is pushed to consumers.
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, a high
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soft drink in a market is more expensive. Perhaps, a company will gain more
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because
people
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are already addicted to
sugar
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while the soft drink gains more margin.
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, if the government keeps
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from the company, they will lose their
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and will need to find an alternative
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to sell soft drinks. In the best case, they might create some food
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such
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as
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-free
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.
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, manufacturers that produce unhealthy
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should pay society back. Everyone needs to take responsibility for their actions include the manufactures. If they create a negative effect (provide unhealthy food) on society, they need to take some action to cover a public loss.
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, many alcohol
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support
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academies to encourage
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to exercise. The
companies
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damage the health, so they cover by
encourage
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people
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to do healthy activities. To summarise, raising the price of
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high level
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sugar
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products
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isn't an effective
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to make
people
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consume less
sugar
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. Keeping a
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tax
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and forcing the
companies
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to do CRS is a better
way
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. These two strategies will prevent any
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from unhealthy
products
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and
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will encourage the producers to do good activities for the public. I believe
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is a sustainable
way
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sugar consumption
  • health problems
  • manufactured food and drink products
  • encourage
  • expensive
  • reduce
  • effectively
  • discourage
  • tight budget
  • purchasing
  • disproportionately
  • lower-income individuals
  • healthier food choices
  • demand
  • regardless
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