Many manufactured food and drink products contain high level off sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?
Many
of
processed foods or drinks contain Change preposition
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a
high levels of Correct the article-noun agreement
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sugar
which are dangerous for public health. Therefore
, these type
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types
products
should be more expensive to prevent people
from buying. I disagree with the statement because it isn't a sustainable method for encouraging people
in consuming less sugar
. I believe adding sugar
tax
without increasing a selling price and enforcing companies
in taking care of public health are a
better Correct article usage
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way
.
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ways
To begin
with, tax
should be kept on products
that contain a high dose of sugar
. This
will force manufactures to produce quality foods, otherwise
, they will receive less profit
. Moreover
, producing healthy products
is the responsibility of manufactures, whereas raising a selling price implies that the responsibility is pushed to consumers. For example
, a high sugar
soft drink in a market is more expensive. Perhaps, a company will gain more profit
because people
are already addicted to sugar
while the soft drink gains more margin. On the other hand
, if the government keeps tax
from the company, they will lose their profit
and will need to find an alternative way
to sell soft drinks. In the best case, they might create some food innovation
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innovations
such
as sugar
-free products
.
In addition
, manufacturers that produce unhealthy products
should pay society back. Everyone needs to take responsibility for their actions include the manufactures. If they create a negative effect (provide unhealthy food) on society, they need to take some action to cover a public loss. For instance
, many alcohol companies
support sport
academies to encourage Change the noun form
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people
to exercise. The companies
damage the health, so they cover by encourage
Change the verb form
encouraging
people
to do healthy activities.
To summarise, raising the price of a
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high level
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high-level
sugar
products
isn't an effective way
to make people
consume less sugar
. Keeping a sugar
tax
and forcing the companies
to do CRS is a better way
. These two strategies will prevent any profit
from unhealthy products
and it
will encourage the producers to do good activities for the public. I believe Correct pronoun usage
they
this
is a sustainable way
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