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Some people think that politicians have the greatest influence on the world. Other people, however, believe that scientists have the greatest influence. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Presidents, ministers, senators, representatives, stateswoman, statesman, politic, technocrats Politicians: On one hand, People with political influences have legislative power that can guide a country. They involve in the law making process, so they have a direct impact on regulations that a society has to follow. These rules create orders in various domains,
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 as financial activities, social infrastructures and transporation.
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, the House of Representatives and the Senate of the U.S are two political bodies that create and approve law and finance the country. For
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 reason, these statewomen and statemen can cast their vote on many political matters. Scentists:
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, scientists have the great power of innovations that can transform the life of people.
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, the invention of electricity has brought life to the industrialization that provide goods and transform resources to conviniences supporting our daily needs. The contribution of science is so substantial that we can not live without.
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