some young people are leaving the countryside to live in cities and towns, leaving only old people in the countryside. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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Few individuals are started settling down in
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side from rural areas and leaving behind countryside dwellers . On the whole, I believe it is a negative development to a great and reasons for same would be discussed in the upcoming paragraphs. Even though, migration of young individuals from backward areas to metropolitan cities
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beneficial for both adults and old aged people. As they will get exposure
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more career opportunities and chances of becoming successful and
finanically
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financially
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more. Later, they will be able to afford all luxuries for their old parents.
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, depopulation has more negative effects on the aged community. Probably, the most prominent reason to believe
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is after adulthood, a person
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his children the most.
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, they will suffer from various physical and mental complications. Proper care should be given to them as most of them are not physically fit even to walk. In fact, symptoms of depression are more seen in old people due to loneliness.
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, it will
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distrub
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the economical stability of
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region. As 90 per cent of
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population will not be able to perform jobs
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needs physical strength and power
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as farming and cattle farming which leads to capital loss. Development of villages stops after
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time resulting in
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of good infrastructure and transport.
Furthmore
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Furthermore
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of locations will become more prone
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catching infections due to
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of
health
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care
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. To conclude,
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moving of
college going
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individuals to towns has
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own pros. But, various negative impacts on aged people are more which should not be ignored.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • migration
  • economic opportunities
  • urban areas
  • rural industries
  • cultural heritage
  • overpopulation
  • infrastructure
  • healthcare facilities
  • educational institutions
  • neglect
  • workforce
  • traditional cultures
  • customs
  • pollution
  • support systems
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