Some young people are leaving the countryside to live in cities and towns, leaving only old people in the countryside. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Nowadays, it is becoming a trend that young
people
would like to go to urban
area to live and work, and leaving old Add an article
an urban
the urban
people
in the countryside
,
because there are more Remove the comma
apply
job
opportunities and entertainment in the city
. I firmly believe that young people
relocates
to cities which is Change the verb form
relocate
more
positive development. The reasons are shown in the forthcoming paragraph.
There are some positive developmentAdd an article
a more
,
if young Remove the comma
apply
people
move to city
. Add an article
the city
firstly
, living in the
new Correct article usage
a
city
that far
away from home, which can improve young Add a missing verb
is far
people
independent capacity and develop money-management
. Correct your spelling
money management
For example
, young people
has
to look for a place to live and find a Change the verb form
have
job
by themselves, instead
of staying with parent’s
house and Fix the agreement mistake
parents’
ask
a Wrong verb form
asking
job
from parents
. Correct pronoun usage
their parents
Furthermore
, young people
has
more chance to meet new friends in the Change the verb form
have
city
and broaden their horizon. For example
, generally speaking, when young people
meet the difficulty related to life, job
, and money, parents cannot show up or help them as soon as possible, friends always provide a shoulder to help you, whatever in mental
or physical aspect. Add an article
the mental
a mental
Moreover
, there are more entertainments in the city
such
as facilities, clubs, pubs. They can go to
there after work to get mental Remove the preposition
apply
releasing
.
Replace the word
release
However
, there are some disadvantages that leaving old people
in the countryside
. Firstly
, The loneliness of old people
will increase, that
may cause Correct pronoun usage
which
mental
Add an article
a mental
the mental
problem
. Fix the agreement mistake
problems
In addition
to
, Some Change preposition
apply
of
Change preposition
apply
old
Add an article
the old
people
cannot take care of themselves, therefore
young people
has to send them to aged care and visit them frequently. Lastly
, countryside
would like to develop Add an article
the countryside
economy
but there is Correct article usage
the economy
shortage
of labour in the Add an article
a shortage
the shortage
countryside
as young people
moves
to urban area.
In summary, Change the verb form
move
this
is a good thing that young people
chasing
their dream in the big Wrong verb form
chase
city
, but they still have to take care of elder people
who live in the countryside
. In addition
to, the government should think about that how overcomes
Change the verb form
to overcome
this
issue Change preposition
of that
that
shortage Correct determiner usage
the
Change preposition
of worker
worker
in the Fix the agreement mistake
workers
countryside
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