Some people think that the best way to reduce the time spent travelling to work is to replace parks and gardens close to the city center with apartment buildings for commuters, but others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

There are conflicting that
apartment
building
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buildings
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for workers should be constructed in
parks
and
gardens
nearby
city
center
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instead
of long commuting.
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essay will discuss both sides of the argument and prove my opinion at the end. On the one hand, it is
good
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idea
that
setting
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up
apartment
building
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buildings
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in
parks
and
gardens
close
city
center
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. The
idea
would
makes
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that
people
can save many times to travel forth and back to work. The commuters would use
time
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for
self improvement
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or with their family and their friends by shorter
distance
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to work.
In addition
, it is possible
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that the workers could reduce their stress because normally,
people
get
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by commuting.
On the other hand
, it can not make sure that the
people
can live at the
apartment
building which is located in
parks
and
gardens
around
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center
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. Generally,
people
who live around
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areas have a budget issue to live around
city
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center
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. Even, destroying
gardens
and
parks
would trigger
to
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environmental issues as well. Recently protecting natural environment comes to the fore in the world for
stoping
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pollution. In conclusion, it is true that constructing
apartment
building
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in
parks
and
gardens
nearby
city
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center
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centre
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instead
of long commuting is a good
idea
but, the way gives harmful consequences of
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environment, and
also
I agree that it is not
best
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idea
, and we can substitute other ideas.
for example
, developing subway or build new bridges for
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a shorter
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distance to access to cities.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • commuters
  • urban areas
  • housing availability
  • alleviating housing crises
  • public transport
  • traffic congestion
  • environmental health
  • biodiversity
  • recreational
  • mental health benefits
  • urban heat islands
  • green lungs
  • community interaction
  • cohesion
  • innovative urban planning
  • multi-use buildings
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