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Some people believe that the best way to improve the general well-being of schoolchildren is to make physical education compulsory in all schools. Others, however, think that this would have little effect on overall health and those other measures are needed. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays,
children
's general well-being has become a big issue. Due to improve
children
 body
health
 some people think that adding
PE
class
 in all schools is the beat ways while others think that there are other measures can be used.
This
 essay discusses both sides and stands at their have other ways to improve
children
 general well-being.
First
 of all, adding
PE
class
 can improve
students
’ physical
health
 and can
also
 learn how to communicate with others and tell
students
 the import of teamwork.
For example
, In my country,
PE
class
 is included in all schools at elementary, junior, and senior high school, all
children
 will have
PE
class
 twice a week.
PE
class
 can not only improve
students
’ physical
health
 and muscle but,
also
 can reduce stress. In our country, people think that
education
 is not just leached knowledge but
also
 leached
students
 how to cooperate with others.
However
, having physical
education
 can let
children
 have a stronger body and have other benefits for
students
.
In addition
, having physical
education
 compulsory in all schools is not the only way to improve the general well-being of schoolchildren. To have a good
health
 exercise is a way but control daily eat is
also
 an important effect. Teaching
children
 to have a balanced diet and learn how to eat is
also
 a good measure that can be used.
For example
, in our country, we have a
health
education
class
 that teaches us how much vegetables, fruit or meat we should eat in a day and how important is to have well-balanced eating. Overall, in my opinion, having
PE
class
 is not the only way can improve the general well-being of schoolchildren. Having a good
health
education
 and teaching
students
 to have a good diet is
also
 a good measure.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • physical fitness
  • child development
  • obesity
  • associated health problems
  • habit of regular physical activity
  • lifelong fitness habits
  • mental well-being
  • stress, anxiety, and depression
  • social interaction
  • teamwork
  • social skills
  • emotional intelligence
  • balanced diet
  • sufficient sleep
  • academic pressure
  • educational policies
  • support systems
  • quality and implementation
  • poorly designed PE activities
  • desired health benefits
  • focusing solely
  • unbalanced curriculum
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