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Some people argue that school should no longer be necessary because children can obtain all the information that they need form the internet. They can learn and be educated at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 has been used as an educational tool due to its rapid development which allows
schools
 and teachers to give lessons, homework and assignments online.
Students
 can
also
 surf
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the
internet
 for research and extra readings.
However
,
schools
 are still irreplaceable by the
Internet
 in terms of the weakness of the
internet
 and the essential role of
schools
.
Internet
 is undoubtedly a very powerful and useful tool to teach
,
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 but only depends on the way we use it.
Firstly
,
students
 lack of teachers' guidance will lead to teenager
internet
 addiction as many of them lack self-discipline and spend so much time on irrelevant websites. What's more, tons of information uploaded on the
internet
 is not in a one-hundred
percent
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 accuracy,
however
, youngsters can not distinguish right and wrong without
further
 explanation and prove.
Therefore
, to make good use of the
internet
, the teacher role is vitally important and must not be eliminated. School is a mini-society for the adolescents before entering the real world, where it is not only a place to gain knowledge
,
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 but a place to train their social skills
such
 as communication, interpersonal and presentation skill.
Furthermore
, apart from family,
students
 can build their values and attitude through teachers and classmates who could only experience it but not by words and images. In
such
 advantages, the
internet
 is clearly not able to provide emotional and soft skills only by written information. To conclude, the
internet
 is absolutely a very helpful assistant when
students
 want to obtain more information and knowledge outside classes, but,
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sometimes, there are more skills and experience they could earn from
schools
 and peers which is not able to replace by electronic parts.
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