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Children are facing more pressures nowadays from academic, social and commercial, perspectives. What are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to reduce these pressures?

#children #pressures #perspectives #measures
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In today's era , offspring are feeling the burden of
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, surrounding and commercial, and judging them. The main reason is too many subjects competition in a short interval of time.
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 problem can be solved by implementing practical knowledge.
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, children need to prepare their
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 within a semester almost in 4 months,
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 not possible for all the
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 because every student has own capacity to read and learn things if
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 impose too much
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 on
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 they cut themselves from
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.
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, they may unable to perform well in academics.
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, my friend is an average student, he get only passing marks , but when
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 give us too much
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, he got punishment because he is not capable to handle so much
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 in a short time.
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, parents always compare their kids with their fellow
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 which break their self-confidence because they are not fulfilling their parent's expectations.
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,
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 should make
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 more interesting to include practical knowledge and make them more creative so, children can imagine things and think unique.
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,
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 think math is a boring subject because it is based on formulas and fundamentals,
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, the teacher should change their teaching methods and make it more interesting and easy so, everyone understands it.
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,
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 should build a level of understanding and trust between the relationships of teacher-student that will help
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 to share their problems with
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. In conclusion,
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 children become fade-up from
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 due to high expectations and difficulty level of
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, it can be solved by taking right decisions like good understanding and knowing about the strength and weaknesses of the student
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,
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 on it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic pressure
  • globalized world
  • competitive education system
  • social media influences
  • cyberbullying
  • commercial pressures
  • aggressive marketing
  • materialistic desires
  • peer pressure
  • high expectations
  • standardized testing
  • quantifiable performance
  • stress and anxiety
  • extracurricular achievements
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