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In the future all cars,buses and trucks will be driverless.The only people traveling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think Ada advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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In the future,all
vehicles
 will be driverless due to
technological
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 development of
transportation
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the transportation
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system
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systems
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. Passengers are the only people who will travel inside using automated
vehicles
 for their destination places. In my point of view,
negative
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the negative
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 impact of automative
vehicles
outweigh
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 the positive impact.
To begin
 with, due to the discovery of
more
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a more
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 convenient
transportation
system
, scientists found that the automated
vehicles
which
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were programmed. Many
expertists
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experts
expertises
 believe that
this
 innovation will
leads
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 to
decrease
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a decrease
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of
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in
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 accident rate happen in
yearly
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years
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 because of lack of awareness, carefulness,
fallen
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falling
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 asleep while driving, don't mind the
sign board
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signboard
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 while driving etc ... Even though automated
vehicles
 will help to reduce
accident
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the accident
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 rate it can be malfunction because of
computer generated
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computer-generated
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 software.
Furthermore
, even there is
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no
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not
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no
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 service charge to the supplier,
maintain
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maintenance
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 fee is expensive due to the high-tech of
the
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apply
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driverless
vehicles
.
Also
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 it needed to maintain well.So that, passengers could not afford
this
 facility.
In addition
 to that,there is a risk that unemployment will be increased.
Present day
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 there are two pick up
application
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applications
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 called "Uber" and "Pick me" apart from the public
transportation
system
. Due to the demand of
transportation
system
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,system
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 most of
people
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the people
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 got employment.
Furthermore
, customers even get their delivery by using
those app
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that app
those apps
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 without
traveling
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travelling
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.If
automative
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automotive
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vehicles
 are used in future, people will
lost
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lose
be lost
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 their job as drivers who don't have
skill
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skills
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 in other fields.So that
this
 will leads
huge
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a huge
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 impact to the country. In conclusion, I believe that
driverless
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a driverless
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transportation
system
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systems
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 could be caused to drawbacks.
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