It is often thought that the increase in juvenile crime can be attributed to violence in the media. Do you agree that this is the main cause of juvenile crime? What solutions can you offer to deal with this situation?

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crime

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been increased and some claim that it is contributed to violence in televisions, movies and social

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. In my view, it may be one of the reasons,

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, it is not the main cause of juvenile

crime

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, family background is vitally important in youth development.

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environment usually directly affect youngsters'

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. Some social research

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indicated that youth

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in poor cities are twice of rich cities because poverty

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usually the cause of

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the appropriate value

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. Most of the

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too as he might misunderstand the correct

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should take part

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responsiblity

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as nowadays some movies and television dramas contain

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scenes

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as a result

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they do. To deal with

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situation, I believe that we should start with educating the right values while

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are growing up. Schools and parents should act as a role to demonstrate the right values by learning about law and justice. What's more, for some under-

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should recruit more

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and last

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government

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should set rules and regulations to restrict the violent

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scenes

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in media,

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, aged under 12 should not watch specific types of movies.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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In conclusion
To conclude
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Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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8Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
32Grammar mistakes
 

3 paragraphs

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 4.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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