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Teenagers should study all school subjects. Or should focus on the subjects that they are good at or like it. Discuss.

Some people believe that studying all
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 others believe
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 advisable for pupils to concentrate on the topics that they like or are good at it. In the following paragraphs, I intend to outline the arguments of both sides.
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 with, it is true that studying all
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school
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 will bring you
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vast
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information
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 about all topics and prepare your brain to learn more about different and difficult affairs.
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, it is essential for juveniles to understand the topics and the main reason for
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 circumstance is the fact that youngsters Interests and preferences are changeable and
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 education system
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 them to discover their own abilities.
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, Learning the base of each subject in
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 system is vital.
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, if students consider their future job prospects and
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 realize their interests curriculum is no longer usable.
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, when I was studying in high
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 I was really fascinated with architecture. Whereby, I really enjoyed learning geometry and math. If I had been focused on
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 that are involved with architecture, I might be a very good and well-known architect now. What I want to say is that schools should discover each student interest and allocate the
subjects
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 that are related to that field. Having considered
aforementioned
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 arguments in some depth, I have reached the conclusion that
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primary and secondary
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 pupils should study all
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.
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 Will help them to find their interests. But, in high
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 they should focus on the
subjects
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 they like.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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