Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems.Sugar products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

The majority of food companies incorporate with
high
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sugar
content of
sugar
product
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products
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which they manufactured. Because of that reason,
people
tend to get those
products
without avoiding healthy facts.Sugary
products
must be manufactured more expensive
in-order
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in order
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to motivate
people
to buy less
sugar
. I strongly
aggree
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agree
with
this
statement and will discuss it
further
in
this
eassay
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essay
. Many
people
tend
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buy quick,processed foods for their meals and snacks.Those
products
often contain added
sugar
.
Furthermore
,many experts believe that increase
of
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consumption
sugar
intake
many
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may
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arise obesity, diabetes and heart problems.
In addition
to that most of the younger generation are affected according to the
resarch
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research
. So government should take action
for
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prevent
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this
such
as
increase
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increasing
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the cost of
products
or request to manufacturers to make foods more healthy way.
Secondly
,the government should encourage
the
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apply
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people
to have healthy foods
instead
of having instant food and beverage.
Otherone
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is manufacture need to show the consumption of
sugar
presentage
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percentage
with
colour
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the colour
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red, yellow, green on
lable
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label
of product.
Then
it would be easier to get information about added
sugar
on
products
and will help to get
most
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the most
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suitable item.
Furthermore
,
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the authority
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authority
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authorities
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should share the information through flyers, radio.
Healthy
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lifestyle is the one factor which
is consider
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in
development
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the development
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of the country.
Therefore
high consumption of
sugar
added
products
will put
people
's
life
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at risk. In conclusion, government and public authority must play a significant role to motivate
people
to live
healthy
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a healthy
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life with
balance
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a balance
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diet.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health problems
  • manufactured food and drink products
  • sugary products
  • excessive sugar consumption
  • discourage
  • promote
  • healthier choices
  • reduce
  • increased taxes
  • fund
  • health education
  • prevention programs
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